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[lady_t_220]

Taking an enormous hatchett to chapter 3. I think I'm going to wind up re-writing the better part of half of it, just to fix the fact that the first draft is all full of "This happened and then that happened, and it made someone think this and feel like that, and that made some stuff happen, and another character was sad about it."
Which, obviously, was fine in a 'get something on the page' first-draft kind of a way, but that whole "show, don't tell" mantra everyone's so fond of? Yeah, it's a whole lot of tell and very little show. Annoyingly, so are chapters 4-9...
Chapter 2 was pretty good though. Tweaked a few details, added a missing bit of dialogue but otherwise plain sailing.
I think I really need to re-watch S2 of Robin Hood though, I kind of feel like I've totally lost my handle on the character motivations that made me want to write an alternate ending in the first place. Damn Season 3...

Comments

[starbuck-a-dale.livejournal.com]

Jeeez I know what you mean :/

I'm always up for a rewatch party over aim!

[lady-t-220.livejournal.com]

I'm so crap at multi-tasking *lol* I like to sit in the dark and wallow single-mindedly with the fast-forward button to get me through Robin's bouts of self-richeous whingery.

[starbuck-a-dale.livejournal.com]

BOY DO I HEAR THAT

[lady-t-220.livejournal.com]

I kept hearing him on that British Gas home-serve advert a little while back, and bemusing my family by exclaiming "Oh my GOD, he's still whiney even when advertising domestic boiler care!"


Of course I'd have enjoyed S3 better if we'd had actor commentaries on the DVD. Even if it was just Gordon being sarcastic at everything...

[starbuck-a-dale.livejournal.com]

Just make sure to enjoy the rarmitage santander and car ads!

[lady-t-220.livejournal.com]

I was quite enjoying the Olympic coverage ads too...

[starbuck-a-dale.livejournal.com]

Oh dude I haven't even clocked those yet!